Thursday, 2 January 2020
my poem
when I got on the moon I grab my spoon I watch some cartoons I saw a raccoon he was flying in a hot air balloon I thought that was weird so I stared i got out my flag and put it on the top and then i the cleared the dust and then i said the moon won't care oh it's time to go so i can feed my dog Moe
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Kia Ora Carley,
ReplyDeleteWhat a beautiful poem! I love how you have included so many rhyming words, it creates a great rhythm and an even more amazing visual. I can just imagine a raccoon in a hot air balloon soaring over the moon. What an outstanding description.
Do you think the flag on the moon you discuss planting would wave or stand perfectly still in the moon’s atmosphere?
It would be really awesome if you could include pictures or colours into your post to really engage your readers. Perhaps you could look at these tips for making eye catching blog posts to help or grab some inspiration.
Hei konā mai,
Shannon (SLJ)